Elaborate Please...

As I passed through the different blogs one blog stood out to me directly and really interested me. That blog was called End In Sight written by Brianna Monks. As a quick summary the blog was over her opinion on abortion and how she agreed with the pro choice side of the controversy. Overall, the blog was pretty well written in the fact that she really gave many of her own opinionated examples, meaning that she made up reasons why people would need the ability to choose whether or not to get an abortion. There were a few things that Brianna needed to incorporate into her blog though to really make it more affective.

First of all, a huge issue I had with it was the spelling errors that were throughout the blog. By having just one spelling error it slowly brings down the article’s credibility, so imagine how much the credibility dropped with multiple errors.

The next thing that is important to notice in this blog is that there are no sources backing up her opinions. Sources are so important when trying to make a blog credible and have a sound argument. Ms. Monks really needed to focus on the reasons why people don’t agree with abortions and debunk those reasons with even more examples from sources. So as I assume you understand from my constant repeating that she really needed to include sources to make sure her blog was credible and sound.

The last thing I do want to quickly bring up as well is that she really didn’t go into great detail on many of the statements she made. She attempted to use the emotional appeals, but didn’t completely elaborate on her attempts. An example I want to give is how she said that many people don’t agree on abortion because of the Bible. What from the Bible makes people not agree with abortion? And why do you think that religion causes controversy when it’s brought into law? Those are only two questions that I bring up from the many that I have after reading this. I am not saying that the blog is a massacre by any means it just really needed to elaborate on her opinions and make sure her arguments were completely credible.

-Kelsey Scott

Oh Arizona...

A major topic over the past few weeks has been the immigration law in Arizona. The Federal Government has gone as far to sue the state of Arizona for their opinions about the law being discriminating. This theory of discrimination is absurd. Yes, there are going to be those few cops that take advantage of the system, and unfortunately discriminate against the Hispanic population, but there are also going to be those law enforcers that really are trying to be neutral in determining who is an illegal immigrant and who isn’t.

This issue of discrimination is such a small issue compared to the larger issue at hand of being to reduce crime rate and send the illegal immigrants back to their home country. There is so much crime in Arizona from the drug cartels that no American citizen is safe! Sometimes the country or states have to take drastic measures for the benefit of the people. In this case of multiple deaths occurring on a day to day basis in Arizona, the state had to take measures into their own hands. There are people like Casey Stegall from Fox News who stated that the talk about crime rate is over-exaggerated. My comment on that though is that when he gave his facts on how crime rate has started to drop in the past year because the immigrants are leaving makes me support the law even more. If we can completely enforce the illegal immigrants to return to their natural home, then it will make our lives much easier and safer. So don’t we want the crime rate to drop in Arizona? Don’t we want our families to be safe? I know I do and I also know that we have no choice but to support this law for the good of our country.

More Information Needed...

When reading through my classmates blogs one blog stood out in particular. The blog called It's 2 PM, Do You Know Where Your President Is, written by Ellen was interesting. She brought up the immigration law in Arizona and what she thought of it. I need to preface this by saying that yes, I do agree with Ellen in the case that the law does create some discrimination, but in her blog she doesn’t give all of the facts. She leaves out a huge part of the reasoning behind enabling the law. One of the main reasons for the law being enacted was that the people of Arizona were not safe. With so many illegal immigrants in Arizona they brought drug cartels and violence with them when they decided to come to Arizona. People started showing up beheaded and some people did the opposite, they disappeared and were never to be seen again. So, with such a huge issue as this, Ellen never once brought that up.

Also, in terms of only appeals that she used, Ellen gave an example of one of her family members having problems finding a job because of the immigrants’ availability for cheap labor. Now, even though this story and theory could be true, she uses only one story and applies it to everyone. So basically she is generalizing one case as the basis of her whole opinion. To make the blog more credible, she should have found a few articles on where the same thing was going on so she could give more than one example.

Now, Ellen did at one point find an article to back an opinion of making all of the immigrants in Arizona citizens, she didn’t give valid reasons for why she should do that especially when there are so many negative outcomes from having a massive amount of illegal immigrants in Arizona. Again, her lack of factual representation about the reasons behind the law doesn’t go together with her opinion. She didn’t think about the repercussions of allowing citizenship to the illegal immigrants. With the major violence problems caused by the massive increase of drug cartels, it is not in the best interest of America to allow those people to become citizens. Even though some of the illegal immigrants are good people that don’t do any harm, there are too many causing problems to American citizens and we as Americans can’t allow that to be going on. So, Ellen really needed to research more before throwing out such a drastic suggestion of allowing all of the current illegal immigrants to become citizens of the United States.

Overall, Ellen honestly does bring up a few good points, but she lacked the factual backing in her opinions. With that said, she did successfully use the pathos appeal, but that doesn’t always make a blog sound. So, by knowing some more information about this controversy, it’s your choice to decide what side you are supporting when it comes to the Arizona Immigration Law.